Clearing the temple
It would take a long time to purge
the idols from my home, the ones
that line the walls and cling to the floor,
screaming at me when I sleep.
It will take a long time to crawl
back to you, with open hands and
bloodshot eyes, the ones that once
read convicting words, but now sleep.
2 Comments:
this is a great piece. especially the last line of the first stanza, "screaming at me while I sleep". the irony is beautiful. just one thing, do you think you could find another word to replace "home" in the second line? (room maybe?) I don't know, something about the 'h' sound disrupts the flow
Interestingly, the original word there was "room," but I thought it sounded a bit juvenile, in a "I live with my parents and this is my room" kind of way, and I wanted it to be more universal than that.
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